More for curiosity's sake than anything else - these were written six, seven, eight years ago? Mostly clumsy & showing all sorts of nods to & mannerisms of but there are a few lines I like & then again these were the poems that formed the basis of the first Lisa J. correspondence. From which I'd like to think I learned a lot.
Maybe I should put them up on the ramp & give them a thorough 'controle technique'?
2 comments:
Yes I liked these a lot. Why are they not in a collection/poetry magazines?
I liked the Hulot poem; also the last 3 lines of 'Go and Buy Some Money'. 'Merely Sandwiches' I liked too, but thought maybe drop the last 2 lines?
I liked the slowing down, irritable effect of 'as she / likes / we' in 'N'est pas?', very effective -- I'd be interested to know why you think they're derivative/your influences. I detect a note of Beckett in 'much weather / much the same' in 'Film script' but that ain't a problem for me.
There are plenty of good poems here. Don't hide them under a bushel.
W
Greetings from Yateley Public Library!
I have 56 mins left of time on terminal 2.
I also have the elder Wafflette pestering me about the DVD collections.
Quick thanks for such positive comments - I did put them together as a little pamphlet (with hand-drawn cover by younger Wafflette) but - as with so many of my projects - they have been gathering dust.
On my return to Brussels I'll dig them out & look at them again - bearing your suggestions in mind.
From now through to the summer I'm really aiming to revise, collect together and print as much as I can.
The past week and a bit has been fun but not very useful in terms of writing time.
More on my return!
Cheers
The C.
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